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Could give a bit more information on the plot, especially Flat out of luck please.

Edit: I wonder what Romina would looks like as a princess though that would be pretty funny to see.

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Romina's Holiday actually has a pretty interesting twist, especially nearing the end, so I'm gonna keep a quiet about it for now. I'm also thinking of having Oll Olly Oxford Free! as a lead in, though I'm not entirely sure.

In Flat Out Of Luck, Nykta, Elenora, and Bernadette each fall victim to a certain type bad luck on what just happends to be Friday the 13th. Not entirely sure whether or not I'm going to put it in the Nightmare in Nylons series, as it's going to be more comical and lighthearted than those stories.

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Hey potk, just wondering if you ever finished these stories. Would love to read them.
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Hey potk, just wondering if you ever finished these stories. Would love to read them.


To be honest I'd completely forgotten about them. I'll have to look on my hard drive to see if I have any of the previous rough drafts/outlines. If there's enough interest, I'll definitely give writing another shot.

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Well I'm definitely a big fan of your stories AND artwork, so please continue!
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So I've re-read both Shoe Theft in the Sanctuary and Nightmare in Nylons ~ Chapter 1, since those were the most popular of the stories I've written (going by download count). I still think that they're good attempts at writing, and the biggest issue seemed to be spelling/grammatical errors. The one thing I think I need to work on the most is the pacing, as while you guys say I'm good at building suspense, some things tend to fly by real fast and don't seem to sink in enough.

If there are any other critiques any one has, I'd like to hear them.

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The best advice I can give is tell your story at your pace. I know that may sound too simple, but too often, a writer will end up taking away from the finished product by rushing and trying to force it. Just imagine the story in your head and write it the way you see it.

As for spelling and grammar, a good word processor program should have a spell checker and in the long run, it will be worth it.

Keep writing and best of luck,

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I agree with Kindred. Just write at your own pace. If you get to a part of the story that doesn't interest you as much then chances are the reader won't have as much interest in it either so it's probably a good idea to pick up the pace and speed through that bit. Who knows you may come back to it later and flesh it out a bit, or you may leave it as is. There are no hard and fast rules when it comes to creative writing. But when you get to a really good part where you want to take the time out and really flesh things out with detail, then, by all means go for it. Your passion will come through in your writing.

You're one of the best writers on here so I don't think you really need much advice, tbh. I never found many spelling or grammatical errors in your work (if there was any, it wasn't very noticeable). I wouldn't worry too much about that. Just keep writing and posting here, you'll only get better with practice.
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